Neni, kalau kata saya, sampai kalimat "bahwa dia yang dulu bukanlah aku..." itu udah cukup dan klimaks banget. Jadi, kalimat tanya dibawahnya bikin puisi ini anti-klimaks.
I could only wonder: What's there crisscrossing your mind I believe it's not that clear as the plain water, but black as the umbr...
About Me
Neni
Bandung, Indonesia
Virgo girl who loves the purple color, chocolate, good book, music, poems, sunshine, fresh air, flowers, the falling leaves, line of trees, the sound of bird's chirping, etc.
She also loves to write, dream, hang out with friends, and spend longer time in bed while wondering about things.:)
2 comments:
Neni, kalau kata saya, sampai kalimat "bahwa dia yang dulu bukanlah aku..." itu udah cukup dan klimaks banget. Jadi, kalimat tanya dibawahnya bikin puisi ini anti-klimaks.
hehehehe... baiklah nia... saya edit ah...
thanks :)
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